Minggu, 22 Maret 2015
Hi, my name is Tuti Dewi Ratna. You can call me Tuti. I’m
member of gruop seven, wanna tell you about my dreams from since i was child until
now.
the first question that i will answer is “Do you have dreams. What are they?”
When i was child i have a dream, teacher is my dream. because i think, with i am as a teacher i can rich and smarter than all of my friend in the class.
the first question that i will answer is “Do you have dreams. What are they?”
When i was child i have a dream, teacher is my dream. because i think, with i am as a teacher i can rich and smarter than all of my friend in the class.
In junior high school my dream change, as a Doctor. But,
cost of study to be a doctor is very expensive. My parents can’t able for the
cost, because I come from a poor family.
after i am graduated from junior, i am interested with
accounting. When vocational high school, i choose accounting majored. because
of it i am falling in love with accounting, after i have graduated from the
vocational and then continue to the college my majored in accounting again. I
think, my passion in here. I wanna be Dirgen of tax, Governoor of Bank
Indonesia, Auditting team in BPK, and public accountant.
And the second is “What do you prefer, being a businessman
or public civil servant?
I chose a public civil servant than the businessman .
the reason is, because I prefer to be employees, servants of government , to serve the country . this time , the state requires a lot of people are honest and brave to fight corruption . I think , my passion is here , as servants of the country. Public civil servant also giving guarantee in the future. I can more comfortable as a public servant, but it is possible i become an entrepreneur.
that’s all about my dreams, forgive if any mistakes. Thanks for attention.
I chose a public civil servant than the businessman .
the reason is, because I prefer to be employees, servants of government , to serve the country . this time , the state requires a lot of people are honest and brave to fight corruption . I think , my passion is here , as servants of the country. Public civil servant also giving guarantee in the future. I can more comfortable as a public servant, but it is possible i become an entrepreneur.
that’s all about my dreams, forgive if any mistakes. Thanks for attention.
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I'm sorry tuti please correct manner of writing, after stopping point should use a capital letter and end with a full stop.
BalasHapusWhere the use, occupation, and name of the subject (I, You, They, We) should also begins with a capital letter.
Mark descriptors to facilitate the reader understand the meaning.
To the past experience, using the past tense.
"Because I think, with I am as a teache, I can rich.." - (that is, rich in science right? but also rich treasure (wages), hehehhe :))
"change" - (changed, because past tenses)
"My parents can’t able for the cost" - ( My Parents can't pay for ...)
"choose" - ( chose, because past tenses) 1
"chose" - (choose, because simpel present)
i'm sorry tuti, a lot the correction, remind my comments if I wrong. give feedback on My work yah :)
thanks for the corrections Novi. :)
Hapusi will improve this..
yeah, i will giving feedback on your post.. :)
Hi Tuti, let me give you correction please..
BalasHapusIn the sentence "the first question that i will answer is “Do you have dreams. What are they?” (it will be perfect if you use the capital character (The) because word "the" is first word of that sentence. i (saya) it must be (I). Thank you :)
thank you Efa for the correction. :)
HapusPlease give me correction in my second project (tenses). Hehe :)
BalasHapusyes, of course. but, wait a moment. internet connections "lola". =D
Hapusmy correction : teacher is my dream, because i think, with i am as a teacher i can rich and smarter than all of my friend in the class.= maybe you can add to be a teacher is my dream bacause I think as a teacher I can rich and smarter than all of my friends.
BalasHapusI think, my passion in here = I think, my passion here.
that’s all about my dreams, forgive if any mistakes = that’s all about my dreams. Forgive me if any mistakes..
I'm sorry tuti if my correction is false..
thanks for the correction Napa. :)
Hapus