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Posted by : Millatuz Zulfa
Kamis, 23 April 2015
Hello , my
name is Millatuz Zulfa ,
NIM
7211414145
Yes I have
a dream.
I want to be (a) public civil servant, because of the high school I had (have) learned (learnt ) about accounting and in college I also majored in accounting in
order to later be able to support me in my work and make it easier to process
the data well. I want to be a professional employee and not manipulate the
data, because I do not want to be an employee who only think of desire alone
but I also think of other people out there
who can not get a job like mine andmorepriority tothe welfare
ofthe company. My dream would I achieve for my parents who always
encouraging to me, and recalls the efforts my parents who want to see I could
go to college of semarang state university. (Semarang State University) ( And not use lowercase but must be use
uppercase).
In addition, after I became a civil servant I also want to be bussinesswoman. In this business I am interested in the restaurant business there to provide all the typical Indonesian food menu, why I chose the restaurant business? because I want to make a more qualified Indonesian specialties and maintain taste typical Indonesian food in order not to lose competitiveness with foreign food. And in this business I also want to encourage housewives to participate, because I think the housewives have a great time and housewives itself can increase their income for daily needs are increasingly varied. and I want to create jobs for the unemployed that today many in Indonesia in order to reduce poverty. And most importantly, after I became a successful bussinesswoman I want to give Haji tickets for my parents and my sister helped the school to a higher level in order to become the pride of parents and I want to be the inspiration of many people.
In addition, after I became a civil servant I also want to be bussinesswoman. In this business I am interested in the restaurant business there to provide all the typical Indonesian food menu, why I chose the restaurant business? because I want to make a more qualified Indonesian specialties and maintain taste typical Indonesian food in order not to lose competitiveness with foreign food. And in this business I also want to encourage housewives to participate, because I think the housewives have a great time and housewives itself can increase their income for daily needs are increasingly varied. and I want to create jobs for the unemployed that today many in Indonesia in order to reduce poverty. And most importantly, after I became a successful bussinesswoman I want to give Haji tickets for my parents and my sister helped the school to a higher level in order to become the pride of parents and I want to be the inspiration of many people.
It looks like the 5th row from the bottom after the word "varied" not rectification. The word "and" there are only line and red color only, please corrected.
BalasHapusyeah, maybe you must corrected again, so let me understand your mistake.
BalasHapusYour work is better than your work (My Dreams) before. Good job friend.
BalasHapus