Kamis, 26 Maret 2015
My name is Rani Vannesa, I am a little girl with a
lot of dreams that I want to realize. When I was a child, my dream was to be
Pilot. I didn’t know why when there are people are asking what I will become on
the future and automatically I said Pilot. But I realize that the requirements
are so complex and difficult for me. I have to be expert in Math, Physics, and
others. Time by time, exactly when I was 5th grade, I have the other
dream. My dream is become doctor, and sometimes become teacher. The other dream
is become a singer, but I finally realize too that I don’t have good voice
until I change my dream anymore.
These are my favorite dream, I really want to become
tour guide or become English teacher. It is begin because I really like to
speak in English, I really like their pronouncing, sounds well. I can
imagine I can traveler around the world while I guide my client. But the
biggest problem is my parents don’t allow me to become English teacher or
become tour guide. So I decide to take accounting bachelor in college. I think
after I graduate I can send application letter in government immediately. I
will apply as government accountant or become public accountant by build my
office step by step.
But on the other side I want to be businessman. I
realize to make my dream come true I have to work hardly, I will get a lot of
salary. I will collect my salary to build my company. Then after that I can
recruit people around me to work together with me in my company. On the other
hands I also help government decrease unemployment number. I believe if my
company runs great, I can get a lot of profit. After I success for becoming
businessman, I will marry with someone that I love. I also want to make my
parents happy by taking them to Mecca. I will life happily with my little
family, spend the day with traveler to every tourism spot, having holiday
without any doubts about my company. Because before I can enjoy my life I will
make sure that my company have developed successfully.
Hi Vanes! Are you sure with this one "I didn’t know why when there are people are asking..." ? I'm little bit confused whether that's wrong or right. For me the sentence is like this " I didn't know why when people were asking..."
BalasHapus"Time by time, exactly when I was 5th grade, I have the other dream" I don't think so. You should use past tense I think. "Time by time, exactly when I was 5th grade, I had the other dream"
"It is begin..." if you wanna make passive voice sentence, you have o use V3 after tobe "It is begun..."
As I know, if you wanna say "bekerja keras/bekerja dengan keras" just say "work hard" not "work hardly".
I suggest you to put article before the occupation :)
I hope your dreams will become true :)
Is it too much? Hehehe