Kamis, 26 Maret 2015
Hallo, my name is Novita
Suryandari. I have a lot of dream, when i was
kid,my dream was to be a teacher,and as the time goes by, i have other dreams.
i wan to be a chef in a fancy restaurant or at the star hotel, and i want to
build their own restaurant in one day. but i also have a desire to be the
accaounting staff or as wokers in the bank and the tax office. Will be in accordance, to be enterprener than I majored in accounting. that
in the future what I want it to run smoothly and all my ideals can be realized,
because I had the principle that the ideals it come out of love. Now I’m learning to cook through cooking student
activity units atuniversity,to prepare the dream in the future . I will have a
lot of money to take my family to makkah for haji. I will save up to prepare to
build a restaurant that I dreamed. I’m promise with passion and a strong
effort, I’m sure all the dreams will
come true do not forget prayer is the key factor, it is just a simple dream for
a simple women like me.
I prefer to be a businessman
of the cpns because for me a more profitable business and have activites that
are not boring,but it becomes cpns there must be rules. If it becomes a
businessman must have enterprener soul,because being enterprener was not easy.
Must have a high degree of patience and have an idea that creative. I have as
pration to become a teacher associated with public civil servent,but I have the disadvantage that difficult to
interact with the crowd and shy.
Will be in accordance = I Will be in accordance.
BalasHapusThank you.
Don't it nov " i wan to be a chef in a fancy restaurant or at the star hotel" but I think you don't use lowercase but you must use uppercase and less the letter T. Example : " I want to be a chef in a fancy restaurant or at the star hotel ". thanks :-)
BalasHapusI agree with Milla, and I think still many words about 'I' you write with lowercase 'i'
BalasHapusand you forgot gave space in word 'atuniversity' :)
okey zuli, milla and vicky. thanks you, have been correcting my work :)
BalasHapusmy correction : that in the future what I want it to run smoothly and all my ideals can be realized : I hope in the future, what I want it can run smoothly and all my ideals can be realized.
BalasHapusI’m promise : I promise, because promise doesn't adjactive but verb.
I have as pration : maybe you mean passion or what ??
to become a teacher associated with public civil servent : public civil servant.. thank's novita:)
Novita, let me give you some correction please :). In your project, I found some incorrect word like "accaounting-> it must be "accounting", wokers (workers), enterprener (entrepreneur), atuniversity it must be better than between at and university there is a space. (paragraph 1)
BalasHapusAfter punctuation full stop (.), you must write the word capital character in the first word, and you must be carefully when you write i (saya) it must be better than you write (I) with capital character. Thank you :)